Rough Cut Feedback from Loz

After uploading my rough cut of my music video, I asked Loz to have a look at my musc video and I also asked him to comment on the video and tell me what he thought of it. He managed to give a lot of feedback and tell me what I should think about changing. 

Loz thought overall it was a good idea, however, he thought that I could cut in down a lot more and the cuts could be a bit more quicker. He also thought that on some parts where my artist is just looking blank and not singing that I could shorten it and add in another shot to make it more interesting. Finally, he thought that when I add in the Junction half of my footage, I could add it on the end like I intended but also put in earlier on so that it is a bit more interesting and cuts between her journey and the Junction Gig.